Agreed about the drabbles. I hadn't written many before January, and I think playing with them has already made me less wordy in my chapter fics.

I think what you chose to describe does further the action in a subtle way. It tells us that time has passed since we checked in last, but Steve's still on a ventilator. Picking the details that add power but also further is a knack - some days I feel like it comes to me with little effort, others I really have to make a conscious effort.

Danny's aching neck and knee make us feel him in the room rather than simply seeing him there, but they also reveal character. This is a guy who's sitting right by that bed no matter what.

And oh, poor dead bunnies! In a pile.